HMD

[rebull]

Let me know if anything feels off and how you think I can amend it. Positive comments about what I have been doing well and what you would like to see more of are also helpful.

Comments

[zelda_hylia]

I love that Lysunder's excessive flirting is at least partially an attempt to cover up his insecurities. It adds a touch of realism <3

[rebull]

Oh man, is it ever. Not only his insecurities about himself as a person, but also about his fear of deeper relationships like the troll quadrants.

But I didn't tell you that.

[zelda_hylia]

No, of course not ;) I'm sure that has nothing to do with the fact that he's gone on three sort-of dates since all this confession business started!

[rebull]

Hey, those make him feel good inside. Shhh.

[zelda_hylia]

Only inside, eh? *brow waggle*

Anyway, carry on, just had to leave a note with a little gold star <3

[anonymousity]

i want to start by saying that it is entertaining to watch your version of the summoner most of the time. you had put a lot of thought into his creation and it is obvious.

but have you considered branching summoner out some more? you seem to be in a cycle of something bad happening to him and him trying to have sex with a lot of people. while you started out with a character idea that looked like it had a lot of depth, it is like watching him become more and more two dimensional over time and i doubt that is your intention.

thank you for reading. :)

[rebull]

Yeah, I notice my back and forth, bad and good. And the sex thing is going to wind down now that he's not really allowed to reach out in that way anymore. The flirting is something he does to calm a mood though and usually more intricate conversations come after that. It's an ice breaker he does that he is familiar with and it usually puts the other person in a better mood, so he likes starting off interactions that way.

I like to think he's pretty deep of a character, I suppose I have to wait for things to occur where more comes to light? It's hard with him because he doesn't really talk about the deeper stuff unless prompted, and that isn't something I can make other people do.

I appreciate your response and will do my best to figure out a good way to let some of his other characteristics known. I'm trying my best and I really do appreciate the feed back, anything to help me flush out his character more and make him seem more real.

[ex_fintastic398]

Hey!! I didn't get either of your private plurks, I don't get alerted to them unless I'm pinged as well, you should email me or something instead. My other contact info is here! Email is best tbh.